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::It was released through an official channel so it's all fair game. --[[User:Jugus|Jugus]] ([[User talk:Jugus|Talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|Contribs]]) 03:01, 27 October 2014 (EDT)

Some extra thoughts. The writing is more descriptive than the Kilo-Five Trilogy but it also feels like it's on fast-forward most of the time. Within the span of the first chapter we've been to how many planets already? I also had some difficulty visualizing just how this shield world is supposed to ~~work—from~~ the description I got the sense it's structured like Requiem but the exterior shell is apparently ''very'' thin. The distance between the inner planetoid's surface and the inner "ceiling" also seems tiny, as the characters, while on a platform in the ceiling, can easily make out details on the terrestrial planetoid surface, smell its air, and descend there in a reasonable timespan. And then there this: ''"Below the craggy remnants of some ancient planetoid, it bristled with plant life, gleamed with streams and waterfalls."'' Where does the planetoid remnant fit in?

Some extra thoughts. The writing is more descriptive than the Kilo-Five Trilogy but it also feels like it's on fast-forward most of the time. Within the span of the first chapter we've been to how many planets already? I also had some difficulty visualizing just how this shield world is supposed to work—<s>from the description I got the sense it's structured like Requiem but the exterior shell is apparently ''very'' thin. The distance between the inner planetoid's surface and the inner "ceiling" also seems tiny, as the characters, while on a platform in the ceiling, can easily make out details on the terrestrial planetoid surface, smell its air, and descend there in a reasonable timespan. And then there this: ''"Below the craggy remnants of some ancient planetoid, it bristled with plant life, gleamed with streams and waterfalls."'' Where does the planetoid remnant fit in?</s>

As an aside, "[[Enduring Bias]]" isn't a terribly original name for a monitor—given the "Bias" part I wonder if it's supposed to be a Contender class, but if so, why would one be left in charge of a random shield world? --[[User:Jugus|Jugus]] ([[User talk:Jugus|Talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|Contribs]]) 03:01, 27 October 2014 (EDT)

:I Suppose we'll get to find out :D [[User:Sith Venator|Sith-venator Wavingstrider]] [[File:Fett helmet.jpg|20px]] ([[User talk:Sith Venator|Commlink]]) 03:38, 27 October 2014 (EDT)

::Never mind about my rambling on the shield world, just re-read it and it actually says the ''ceiling'' was convex, hence the terrestrial environment was on the inner surface, like on a Dyson sphere instead of a Requiem/Shellworld type structure. There's just a planetoid there inside the thing to provide a "ceiling". The thing on the cover certainly doesn't match up with this, but it's not like artists haven't made mistakes before. --[[User:Jugus|Jugus]] ([[User talk:Jugus|Talk]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|Contribs]]) 13:14, 27 October 2014 (EDT)

:Interesting to note that there's ''another'' reference to an unknown species - the ones who shot 'Crecka's ship to pieces, on the endges of what was then Sangheili space, clearly interstellar and powerful enough to damage a Sangheili starship. I don't know if it's tied to the ''apparent'' new species in Escalation, but I certainly hope it related to the strange ship that crashed on Alpha Halo. -- [[User:Morhek|Qura 'Morhek]] [[w:c:halofanon:user:Specops306|The Autocrat]] [[User talk:Specops306|of Morheka]] 03:58, 27 October 2014 (EDT)

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 ::It was released through an official channel so it's all fair game. --[[User:Jugus|<font color="MidnightBlue"><b>Jugus</b></font>]] <small>([[User talk:Jugus|<font color="Gray">Talk</font>]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|<font color="Gray">Contribs</font>]])</small> 03:01, 27 October 2014 (EDT)
-Some extra thoughts. The writing is more descriptive than the Kilo-Five Trilogy but it also feels like it's on fast-forward most of the time. Within the span of the first chapter we've been to how many planets already? I also had some difficulty visualizing just how this shield world is supposed to work—from the description I got the sense it's structured like Requiem but the exterior shell is apparently ''very'' thin. The distance between the inner planetoid's surface and the inner "ceiling" also seems tiny, as the characters, while on a platform in the ceiling, can easily make out details on the terrestrial planetoid surface, smell its air, and descend there in a reasonable timespan. And then there this: ''"Below the craggy remnants of some ancient planetoid, it bristled with plant life, gleamed with streams and waterfalls."'' Where does the planetoid remnant fit in?
+Some extra thoughts. The writing is more descriptive than the Kilo-Five Trilogy but it also feels like it's on fast-forward most of the time. Within the span of the first chapter we've been to how many planets already? I also had some difficulty visualizing just how this shield world is supposed to work—<s>from the description I got the sense it's structured like Requiem but the exterior shell is apparently ''very'' thin. The distance between the inner planetoid's surface and the inner "ceiling" also seems tiny, as the characters, while on a platform in the ceiling, can easily make out details on the terrestrial planetoid surface, smell its air, and descend there in a reasonable timespan. And then there this: ''"Below the craggy remnants of some ancient planetoid, it bristled with plant life, gleamed with streams and waterfalls."'' Where does the planetoid remnant fit in?</s>
 As an aside, "[[Enduring Bias]]" isn't a terribly original name for a monitor—given the "Bias" part I wonder if it's supposed to be a Contender class, but if so, why would one be left in charge of a random shield world? --[[User:Jugus|<font color="MidnightBlue"><b>Jugus</b></font>]] <small>([[User talk:Jugus|<font color="Gray">Talk</font>]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|<font color="Gray">Contribs</font>]])</small> 03:01, 27 October 2014 (EDT)
 :I Suppose we'll get to find out :D [[User:Sith Venator|<span style="color:green">Sith-venator Wavingstrider</span>]] [[File:Fett helmet.jpg|20px]] ([[User talk:Sith Venator|<span style="color:blue">Commlink</span>]]) 03:38, 27 October 2014 (EDT)
+::Never mind about my rambling on the shield world, just re-read it and it actually says the ''ceiling'' was convex, hence the terrestrial environment was on the inner surface, like on a Dyson sphere instead of a Requiem/Shellworld type structure. There's just a planetoid there inside the thing to provide a "ceiling". The thing on the cover certainly doesn't match up with this, but it's not like artists haven't made mistakes before. --[[User:Jugus|<font color="MidnightBlue"><b>Jugus</b></font>]] <small>([[User talk:Jugus|<font color="Gray">Talk</font>]] | [[Special:Contributions/Jugus|<font color="Gray">Contribs</font>]])</small> 13:14, 27 October 2014 (EDT)
 :Interesting to note that there's ''another'' reference to an unknown species - the ones who shot 'Crecka's ship to pieces, on the endges of what was then Sangheili space, clearly interstellar and powerful enough to damage a Sangheili starship. I don't know if it's tied to the ''apparent'' new species in Escalation, but I certainly hope it related to the strange ship that crashed on Alpha Halo. -- [[User:Morhek|<b><font color=indigo>Qura 'Morhek</font></b>]] [[w:c:halofanon:user:Specops306|<u><i><font color=blue><sup>The Autocrat</sup></font></i></u>]] [[User talk:Specops306|<u><i><font color=purple><sup>of Morheka</sup></font></i></u>]] 03:58, 27 October 2014 (EDT)