Story
READ THIS!! - This section is for feedback on "The Life of War," my fanfic. I have organized it by user. Please make it a subheading within your section like so: ===Title=== . If you have not made a comment here before, make a heading with your username ( ==Username== ) then a sub heading for your comment. Please make sure your spelling and grammar is at least decent.Make sure to sign the post with four tildes, in order to have the timestamp. Pryo 'Zarkum File:Major-gr1.gif My COM My Work My Story 18:09, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Updates:
- Due to lack of images, this will soon be included:
Pryo 'Zarkum File:Major-gr1.gif My COM My Work My Story 18:09, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Lt. Church
Lt. Church's Post
I have read it, nice Lt. Church 05:38, 1 April 2008 (UTC)Lt. Church
Noga 'Putumee
Feedback, and including Noga 'Putumee in the story
It looks good so far. When is it set? Is this his initiation into the army?
You could include Noga 'Putumee as his mentor or commander or something similar. or if he goes on a mission when he joins up you could include Noga Putumee there. In my opinion the first option is preferable. this is after noga putumee recovered from his wound on the fist Halo so you could include references to that. If you have read halo the flood you should know his personality. you could alter it slightly to be a bit more caring for the troops under his command after his close to death experience.
Please use my advice.
--User:Noga 'Putumee File:Zealot3.jpg 19:53, 1 April 2008 (UTC)
Chapter 2
Chapter 2 looking good!
Is this set in the covenant civil war becuase if it is, Noga 'Putumee wil be Noga 'Putum (the ee is for being in the covenant military)
--User:Noga 'Putumee File:Zealot3.jpg 18:06, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
RE: Chapter 2 (Again...)
You will be one of the instructors at Iruiru File:Major-gr1.gif Pryo 'Zarkum 16:24, 9 April 2008 (UTC)
Chapter 2 (Again...)
I like the plot twist and the friendship with Rtas Vadum. It will be a very interesing story by the looks of it.
Mind me asking, when am I going to turn up in the plot of things?
--User:Noga 'Putumee File:Zealot3.jpg 21:30, 5 April 2008 (UTC)
Noga 'Putumee's Feedback
Wow! It's really cool and I like all the ideas you've put in it! Keep it up! --User:Noga 'Putumee File:Zealot3.jpg 17:25, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Stigma-231
Intrigue
I quite like your story so far! Do you write often? I believe this could be turned into a rather thick storyline, if you have enough patience and such. Tell me when there's more? I'm eager to read more.
-Umos 'Qikost Sword-wielding Minors and Shining Blue Spiders Comm 02:45, 2 April 2008 (UTC)
Zarra 'Yairum
The Story
I love it! Great job so far. By the way Zarra's autobiography is up on my wiki user page if you want to see it. -User:Zarra 'Yairum
Swords
I know another way I could help with the story. I know a few basic sword fighting techniques. It was part of a martial arts class and I forgot most of it, (it was a long time ago), but I do remember the nine angles of attack, and some methods of blocking and counter attacking. Its realy basic, but it may be useful. I'll put it up here if you need it. -User:Zarra 'Yairum
Including My Character
I can't wait to read more! You are a good writer. As for Zarra's skills, she is good at sniping, and she is good at sword fighting, but she never uses a sword until around HaloCE. At the point in time your story takes place she is most likely training to become a medic. I can only speculate on what a medic in the covenant would be like but my guess is that they would have very plain armor, weak shields, and stealth. --Zarra 'Yairum 16:09, 5 May 2008 (UTC)
Concilor Katar
One thing
You would be in the late part of the Age of Conservation if you were born in 2515. The Age of Reclamation begun with the Battle of Harvest I believe. - Councilor Katar
Everything Else
Pretty self explanatory. Same rules as the above section. Pryo' Zarkum 16:44, 31 March 2008 (UTC)
Read Mine
Just read mine: http://halo.wikia.com/wiki/User:Halo7
Fanfiction
Hi. Fanfiction isn't allowed on Halopedia, I'm afraid. Please use our sister site Halo Fanon instead, and just post a link to it. --Dragonclaws(talk) 05:16, 4 April 2008 (UTC)