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:You mean this one? It's the only one with a reference to either the word 'fair', or 'even'. Here's a source. Watch, and listen closely to what he says: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x89jHCVmkzE&feature=channel_page <div style="font-variant:small-caps;">'''[[User:Smoke.|<font color="#666666">S</font>]][[User talk:Smoke.|<font color="#666666">mok</font>]][[Special:Editcount/Smoke.|<font color="#666666">e</font>]]'''</div> 14:58, 3 April 2009 (UTC) | :You mean this one? It's the only one with a reference to either the word 'fair', or 'even'. Here's a source. Watch, and listen closely to what he says: http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=x89jHCVmkzE&feature=channel_page <div style="font-variant:small-caps;">'''[[User:Smoke.|<font color="#666666">S</font>]][[User talk:Smoke.|<font color="#666666">mok</font>]][[Special:Editcount/Smoke.|<font color="#666666">e</font>]]'''</div> 14:58, 3 April 2009 (UTC) | ||
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This article needs a rewrite to make it more concise. The paragraphs sound too much like random collections of sentences, and in several paragraphs the same information is repeated unnecessarily. If no one else fixes it I'm going to do it. | |||