Halopedia:Monitors of Halopedia/First Battle of Mombasa

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Support
After a clean-up effort by me, I hearby nominate this article as an "Featured Article". General  Tony  Talk 10/27/2007

A little short, but FA worthy nonetheless. -- Manticore   Talk 22:46, 31 October 2007 (UTC)

It works, it works. -- E D  19:45, 2 November 2007 (UTC)

Disapprove
- Strongest possible opposition. Waaaay too brief, and does not fit Manual of Style at all. Cheers, RelentlessRecusant  'o the Halopedia Team http://images.wikia.com/rainbowsix/images/7/73/GDI2.jpg TALK • MESSAGE 19:48, 2 November 2007 (UTC)


 * Though I respect your opinion Relentless, there really isn't that much material to put into the article. And thats included stuff from Halo 2, Halo 3, Ghosts of Onyx, and Second Sunrise over New Mombasa. [[Image:Halopedia - Anti-Vandal Assault Corps Logo 01.PNG|25px]] General  Tony  Talk 11/02/2007

- The fact of the matter is that it's wrong, and it's the wrong format - as per below. Until those things are fixed, this SHOULD NOT BE A FEATURED ARTICLE. Period. It's not encyclopedic, it needs considerable work and it's going to become an FA before it's ready at this rate. --forgottenlord 21:42, 2 November 2007 (UTC)

Things to do

 * 1) Fact checking: Only one ship made it past the line unless you can find a source that says otherwise.
 * 2) This is an encyclopedia article describing the events of a battle past - therefore the tense should be past-tense, not present.  The tenses are mixed in many places and should be changed as well.

Comments
This article has been completely overhauled by myself and Sgt.johnson. Please review and re-evaluate your votes --forgottenlord 00:07, 3 November 2007 (UTC)